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The pause
between the casual
recounting of my day and
your response

doesn't sound like
I love you.
But you don't hear
I've stopped missing you, either,
do you.
Pauses where our shouts should be.

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NovaMar2907 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011
Good Lord, have you lived my life??
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011
Beautiful and understated.
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comesniffsharpies Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
i love this :heart:
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mackwrites Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009
Not only is the concept excellent but so is the carry-through. Everything works so well there's nothing I don't like about it! haha :)
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chelx Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
pauses are the spaces between your fingers that remembered today that they can be spaces, not just places for his fingers to weave.
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i learnt that myself one day not long ago.
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this-epiphany Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009   Writer
what a beautiful sentiment. and true, too.

missing him isn't a bad thing, anymore. it's hard to explain. missing him used to be such a destructive, crippling feeling. now, it's something I hold close to my chest and linger over. it's something that I allow myself to indulge in, because one day he's going to be gone and the missing him will fade and change again into something new.

I want to always miss him. and to love again, and deeply, and for it to be beautiful and real, as I know it will be - but nevertheless, to miss him all the while.
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chelx Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i think you must miss him. or something of him. when two people are tangled like that, the kinks in the thread dont straighten out.

but that's just the beauty of it all (once we get over the obsession with straight lines).
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iheldyoucloser Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
hmm. this really made me think.

i love love love the title.
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alapip Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
-proximity-, continues the reading into.
might be better to focus away?
neither avoid, nor gravitate to.

you heal concurrent wounds, Steph.
considering this, be proud of your progress.

also, proud of your writing...

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pip
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this-epiphany Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009   Writer
you're probably right, Pip. but soon enough we'll be in different cities and living completely different lives, and that's where our story is going to end, finally. so for now, I'd rather ache with him near than go on in his absence.

besides - I write so much better when he's near. it's still worth it. it's a different kind of heartache.
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